Deep review of the major parts

source/bibliography.bib

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         keywords  = "ethics"
 }
 
+@online{innerself,
+        url       = "https://www.collinsdictionary.com/dictionary/english/inner-self",
+        keywords  = "inner self"
+}
+
 @online{socialsorting,
         author    = "David Lyon",
         title     = "Social Media Surveillance: Who is Doing It?",
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 @book{thecircle,
         title={The Circle},
-        author={David Eggers},
+        author={Dave Eggers},
         isbn={978-0-385-35139-3},
         year={2013},
         publisher={McSweeney's},

source/sections/blackbox.tex

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-\section{Our Black Box}
+\section{Opening Our Black Box}
 \textit{Biondi} in her presentation makes another last point, saying that a program of global surveillance through bulk data collection may put at risk the and violate the most intimate part of a person, the essence of the human being. As said in the introduction it is really difficult to define what we mean by essence of a person, but what we are referring to here is in fact what we may define the black box of ourself, that part of the inner person that would never be possible to share with the others, what in fact represent what we are and what we feel as human beings.\\
-If we accept to open that \textbf{black box}, I think that we may ultimately loose what defines us as humans. We would loose the ability to have control over the relationships that we have with each other, risking to fall in the situation depicted by \textbf{Rachels}, in which we would have a flattening of all the interactions. We would be no more able to decide what we are, we would be only a copy of what data tells about us.\\
+She indeed says that if we accept to open that \textbf{black box}, we may ultimately loose what defines us as humans. We would loose the ability to have control over the relationships that we have with each other.
+And I find a really deep link with the work of \textit{Rachels} \cite{privacyimportant} and of \textit{Eggers} in this conclusion.
+If we continue bringing to the extreme this opennes towards the world, if we accept that there are no boundaries in private information, we really risk to arrive in the situation depicted by \textit{Rachels} in which we would have a flattening of all the interactions. We would be no more able to decide what we are, we would be only a \textbf{copy} of what data tells about us.\\
 And what about the relation that we have with \textbf{ourselves}? What if for the fear of influencing the data copy of ourselves we are forced to behave in a way that is not what we are, what we feel? We would never have a second chance in anything, we would be too tightly bound to the past, we would ultimately loose our free will. We would not even be able to search for something on a search engine without the fear that maybe 20 years from now that thing could be used against us.\\
 We would not be able to be honest and sincere with our inner self, and at that point what really makes us humans? What separates one individual from the rest of the world?
+Are we really sure that we want to completely open our black box to the world?

source/sections/conclusions.tex

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 \section{Conclusions}
 To conclude I would try to better detail the implications of my thesis.\\
 I'm not saying that we have to reject all forms of on-line communications, of social media etc... Of course often these instruments can be really helpful, and for example the free circulation of knowledge that we have today in scientific and research fields would not have been possible without the technological instruments that we developed.\\
-What I tried to highlight is that we, as a society, need to really start to think that the off-line and on-line world is becoming something unified, and in particular that we need to take action against the state of surveillance that is gradually becoming something seen as normal and that is done for our own good.\\
+What I tried to highlight is that we, as a society, need to really start to think that the \textbf{off-line} and \textbf{on-line} world is becoming something \textbf{unified}, and in particular that we need to take action against the state of surveillance that is gradually becoming something seen as normal and that is done for our own good.\\
 And responding to this with merely technological solutions can't be enough, we really need to promote a discussion on an ethical and moral level on the implications of surveillance and the loss of privacy.\\
-We don't have a ready to use solution for this problem, we have seen that technology alone can't solve the problem, but neither we can expect that laws made by non technical people will solve the issue by simply adapting the norms that we have in a different context. The technology is evolving at a too high speed to simply try to keep the pace with it. We need to at least try to think ahead and to develop a discussion framework suitable for this purpose, starting by creating committees that have heterogeneous types of competences and backgrounds to try to sketch solutions and norms for these kind of problematic situations.\\
-In particular what I have tried to show here is that we really need to deal with the problem of surveillance as soon as possible, because I am deeply convinced that the direction that we will follow will shape our society and us as individuals in the (not so distant) future. And I really believe that we should not loose this opportunity to decide what we want it to be and what we want us to be.
+We don't have a ready to use solution for this problem, we have seen that technology alone can't solve the problem, but neither we can expect that laws made by \textbf{non technical people} will solve the issue by simply adapting the norms that we have in a different context. The technology is evolving at a too high speed to simply try to keep the pace with it. We need to at least try to think ahead and to develop a discussion framework suitable for this purpose, starting by creating committees that have \textbf{heterogeneous} types of competences and backgrounds to try to sketch solutions and norms for these kind of problematic situations.\\
+We really need \textbf{norms} and \textbf{guidelines} for the collection and management of personal information for on-line services and platforms. We can't cope with these situations only after problems arises. We need to be pro-active and to avoid to reach a point from which it would be difficult coming back.\\
+In particular what I have tried to show here is that we really need to deal with the problem of surveillance as soon as possible, because I am deeply convinced that the direction that we will follow will shape our society and us as individuals in the (not so distant) future. So regardless of our personal opinion in the matter we should try to at least think what we really want, and understand that these problems are not less important that many others issues that our society is confronting with.
+And I really believe that we should not loose this opportunity to decide what we want our \textbf{society to be} and what we want ourself to be.

source/sections/goingbeyond.tex

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 \section{Going Beyond}
 But how all this really connect with the claim that I'm making that we need to take action immediately in order to protect our right to privacy before it is too late?\\
-I think that another suggestion point of view is given by the novel by \textit{David Eggers} \textit{The Circle}\cite{thecircle}. In the book the author describe a society in which the company leader in the market of \textbf{social media} is growing at an unstoppable rhythm, expanding its business in basically every sector possible.\\
+I think that another suggestion point of view is given by the novel by \textit{Dave Eggers} \textit{The Circle}\cite{thecircle}. In the book the author describe a society in which the company leader in the market of \textbf{social media} is growing at an unstoppable rhythm, expanding its business in basically every sector possible.\\
 The main character is a new hire in this company, and through the novel she'll gain roles of major importance, but in doing that she'll sacrifice some of their initial beliefs and values embracing the philosophy of the company, that is basically to try to build a better world by embracing total openness towards the others in any scope possible. Indeed the character at the end will accept to wear a camera accessible always by anyone.\\
 I think that after having finished the novel the 99\% of the reader said to themselves that in that situation they would have reacted differently, they would have never accepted those conditions and that the situations depicted by the author is too unrealistic. While I partially agree with this last conclusion that the novel takes to the extreme the consequences of the use of technology, I can't help but noticing that in the last years there have been a huge trend regarding the use of the data provided by the user of IT services, trend that goes under the buzzword \textbf{Big Data}.\\
 So it may be true that we will never accept to voluntarily wear a camera that streams 24h per day what we see, but we also often accept conditions of use for products and services without even thinking that we may be giving access to a certain type of information to the supplier of the service or maybe even to a third party entity, as recently has happened with the Samsung Smart TV case were in the terms of use was suggested not to talk about delicate matters in front of the TV because that data could be shared with a third party entity for analysis purposes.

source/sections/introduction.tex

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 \section{Introduction}
 In our everyday life we are often exposed at articles, newspapers and media that argue about the possibility to sacrifice part of our privacy in favor of a \textbf{greater good}, the security of our society.\\
 In this paper I don't want to state that I have the definitive solution to this problem, but that if we want to sacrifice our privacy we should do it in a conscious and informed manner, not in a subtle way like we are doing it now.\\
-Indeed too often we give up a bit of our privacy simply by clicking the \textbf{agree} button on the \textit{terms of service} of a new application that we just downloaded on our smartphone. An example of how it could happen: we are just trying to download the newest and shiniest application to share moments of our life with our \textit{friends} and we are unconsciously agreeing to give the rights to utilize or distribute those images to the provider of the application.\\
-We may not think that this is in some way damaging our privacy, but as we shall see it is.
-I also find particularly subtle that in some way we care about our privacy when the actor involved is a government or a public entity, but too we often don't think at the consequences of leaving in the hands of private companies and organizations rights over our data and informations.\\
-The other main point that I'll try to explain is that by simply trying to transfer concepts and normatives from the classical \textit{world} to the \textit{digital} one may be not enough, since as we often see in the field of \textit{computer ethics} this would be insufficient.\\
-So my thesis is that we should in some sense review our concept of what concerns privacy and what not, going beyond the classical definitions used until now. This does not mean that we should simply give up our rights and accept blindly what society or more often companies and governments tell us it is right, simply because, for example, the economic interests that drive the choices and the direction of development that a big corporation follows can not be aligned with the interests of the individual, and we have so many examples of such situations that would be really useless to list some of them.\\
-In conclusion I'll try to give evidence that the development of a framework suitable for all the discussions regarding this topic is necessary and would be the only way to enable our society to have a common ground for challenging and solving easily this problems in the future.
+Indeed too often we give up a bit of our privacy simply by clicking the \textbf{agree} button on the \textit{terms of service} of a new application that we just downloaded on our smartphone.\\
+I also find particularly subtle that in some way we care about our privacy when the actor involved is a government or a public entity, but too often we don't think at the consequences of leaving in the hands of private companies and organizations rights over our data, informations and communications.\\
+This allows the \textbf{proliferation} of a situation of bulk data collection and global surveillance that in my opinion is not justified and also put at great risk important rights and values of our society. This is the main and urgent problem that we have to cope with in my opinion.\\
+In doing this I will start by briefly introducing the concept of individual privacy and how our life and our relationships are influenced by it, summing up the work done in this famous paper \cite{privacyimportant} by James Rachels.\\
+Then I'll try to expose and detail some of the concepts of a possible point of view on the matter that \textit{Charleyne Biondi} developed and exposed during this presentation \cite{cccvideo}.\\
+This really has been the inspiration point for this paper, because I found that the main concepts and idea exposed are really interesting and explain very well what is the problem with global surveillance. I want to place a little disclaimer here and say that there is a debatable and difficult concept explained in the last section. We will talk about \textbf{essence} and \textbf{inner self} of an individual. Of course it is not easy to say what this concept is. I assume that for the rest of the discussion the inner self will mean, citing this definition \cite{innerself}, "a person's true or internal mind, soul, or nature", and also I find that we can imagine it as the inner part of ourself that really distinguish us from the external world. Of course trying to explaining what this is is not an easy job, even philosophers would have difficulties in agreeing on a common definition of this concept. But for this reading I suggest to simply follow your gut reaction and imagine what pictures in our mind when we say inner self.\\
+Indeed what I will try to do is to detail as much as possible the ideas by \textit{Biondi} and to find a link first with the work of \textit{Rachels} and to link the scenario depicted in this book \cite{thecircle} by \textit{Dave Eggers} in order to sustain my thesis that we need to gain awareness on the current situation of surveillance and to find solutions to this problem.\\
+What I will try to prove is that the answer that we too often hear \textbf{"I have nothing to hide"} minimizes the problem and is not acceptable in the sense that the consequences of what we decide in the field of individual privacy are too important and closely concerns all of us, and so we should discuss on this matter and decide what is the direction to follow. And since the on-line and off-line world are becoming unified, we should really care of these issues.